Fantasy shoe stories

 

We enjoyed inspecting our shoe and answering questions about it.  After doing a detailed drawing, we made a rough copy of our shoe and turned it into a fantasy design.  Take a look at our brilliant art work!  We didn't stop there...  We then imagined walking down the stairs, falling into our shoe and ending up in our fantasy land.  Enjoy reading the comments in this post to find out our individual stories.  

Of course, we tried to use our targets so you should be able to spot good openers and language choice as you read them!

Persuasive explanation from Levi

See how Levi has used his targets this week, wrote a very considered piece and very carefully edited his work. Brilliant!

The Unsinkable - SUNK Y5 Alisha

Delightful style like you really are Eva and there really is Jane reading your letter. Check out the detail... Even the address is thought through! Which newspaper are you going to be editing? I think you could have a successful writing career ahead!

Ellie W takes the role of Eva who survived on the Titanic

Great writing in just the right style!

Titanic Doomed: Y5 Caitlin C

Superb pieces of writing where Caitlin has actively used her targets and considered what I was looking for.

Titanic Sank Y5 Sumara

Sumara's hard work is clearly paying off here...

Historic voyage ends in a titanic fail... Blake Y5

VERY good writing indeed!

I love the way Blake remembered to jot in the margin what he was going to try and use and ticked it off as he wrote.