Friday 20 April 2012

The Unsinkable - SUNK Y5 Alisha

Delightful style like you really are Eva and there really is Jane reading your letter. Check out the detail... Even the address is thought through! Which newspaper are you going to be editing? I think you could have a successful writing career ahead!

Thursday 19 April 2012

Ellie W takes the role of Eva who survived on the Titanic

Great writing in just the right style!

Titanic Doomed: Y5 Caitlin C

Superb pieces of writing where Caitlin has actively used her targets and considered what I was looking for.

Titanic Sank Y5 Sumara

Sumara's hard work is clearly paying off here...

Historic voyage ends in a titanic fail... Blake Y5

VERY good writing indeed!

I love the way Blake remembered to jot in the margin what he was going to try and use and ticked it off as he wrote.

Titanic Tragedy from Y5

2 cracking pieces of writing in Max's usual entertaining style!

Titanic Tragedy Recount Letter

See how Megan in Y5 has used a green pen to improve her work and a green highlighter to show off the use of her targets which help her hit the next level of learning.