Wednesday, 25 January 2012

Admire our persuasive techniques!

Enjoy reading Max & Joshua's persuasive letters from Year 5.

Following our trip on Monday, they twisted a set of facts to try to persuade the Victorian prime minister Mr Disraeli to improve working conditions for children.

Can you spot their techniques?




Dear Mr Disraeli
I am writing to tell you that the mining conditions are horrible! Please change the way miners are  working or at least the child miners mainly because millions of rats live with the poor workers .

Secondly ,more than half of the workers  have seen a serious injury or had the roof collapse on them in fact I’m surprised you  have any workers left!

Also, there are no toilets down the mines so it will be difficult to go to the bathroom and millions of poor children are losing limbs doing your dirty work  .

Although you are getting rich and it’s all happy for you, it’s terrible for your poor workers  

Therefore no child under the age of ten should do down a coal mine and that is final!

Yours sincerely
lord shaftesbury
Lord shaftesbury

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