Paige's fabulous Upside Down film ending

Spinning into space by JoshH in Y5

We watched a short film about someone who didn't get pulled by gravity.  One day, they disappeared into space.  Here's Josh's fabulous description about what happened.  I love the question at the end. What do you like about it?

I found myself spinning upwards.  Higher and higher.  When I looked around, a gigantic earth tornado was spinning at me. I was in a dark, dense place it was like a black hole . I glanced at earth it looked 390,000 to240,000 miles away . I couldn’t be that far away could  I? 

Fabulous start to the Y5 term

Year 5 have all begun well; showing off their writing skills.

Here's a great example of Adam 'talking to the audience.' Brilliant!

Plus... fantastic editing with a green pen from Milla. We're on a roll!

Fantasy shoe stories

 

We enjoyed inspecting our shoe and answering questions about it.  After doing a detailed drawing, we made a rough copy of our shoe and turned it into a fantasy design.  Take a look at our brilliant art work!  We didn't stop there...  We then imagined walking down the stairs, falling into our shoe and ending up in our fantasy land.  Enjoy reading the comments in this post to find out our individual stories.  

Of course, we tried to use our targets so you should be able to spot good openers and language choice as you read them!

Persuasive explanation from Levi

See how Levi has used his targets this week, wrote a very considered piece and very carefully edited his work. Brilliant!

The Unsinkable - SUNK Y5 Alisha

Delightful style like you really are Eva and there really is Jane reading your letter. Check out the detail... Even the address is thought through! Which newspaper are you going to be editing? I think you could have a successful writing career ahead!

Ellie W takes the role of Eva who survived on the Titanic

Great writing in just the right style!

Titanic Doomed: Y5 Caitlin C

Superb pieces of writing where Caitlin has actively used her targets and considered what I was looking for.

Titanic Sank Y5 Sumara

Sumara's hard work is clearly paying off here...

Historic voyage ends in a titanic fail... Blake Y5

VERY good writing indeed!

I love the way Blake remembered to jot in the margin what he was going to try and use and ticked it off as he wrote.

Titanic Tragedy from Y5

2 cracking pieces of writing in Max's usual entertaining style!

Titanic Tragedy Recount Letter

See how Megan in Y5 has used a green pen to improve her work and a green highlighter to show off the use of her targets which help her hit the next level of learning.

Y5 Max being Alex Rider in the jellyfish tank.

Enjoy Max's humorous writing style as he describes being stuck inside the jellyfish tank trying to escape.


Dirty, dirty tank!


When I was stuck in the tank I kept on smashing into the sides. (That is until I noticed that on the sides there was jellyfish leavings firmed onto it!) It appeared that no one had cleared out the sides in ages! Even if I didn’t drown from the water or get killed by the jelly fish I would die in disgust. So I did some quick thinking and burnt the cage broke free and watched the jellyfish eat the evil woman and now she’s dead hooray! 


Despite the fact the jellyfish had helped me I grabbed the harpoon and shot it! (I wish)

Hansel & Gretel swap letters with a witch

Dear wicked witch,

I have to say you are so mean.

Since when have there been a witch that eats children it brought a tear to our eyes it was so evil of you to try and eat us.  You are so lucky that Gretel didn't actually burn you to death.


I am so happy you are in prison for TEN years but if you ever get out I am going to tell dad you are an evil old witch and he may even warn you to leave us alone and get on with life!

From
Hansel and Gretel


Dear Hansel (I suspect it was you that wrote to me)

As I read your letter I began to cry.  I will tell why I tried to eat you.

I was sent a threat letter saying I must catch 2 children and fatten one up if possible the male if there is one.
So I wrote back and asked why I needed to do this and they replied if I didn't they would destroy my wonderful house of sweets and chocolate.

I heard you were being dumped in the woods so I put this strangers plan into action.
I am so sorry if you thought I was an evil old hag.  Really I could never harm a child if I had the choice

Thanks for the letter
Nanny Cloggs


(More hard work from CaitlinM)

Poor Little Red! CaitlinM gets into role again!

Daisy Meadow
Horror wood
BD74 NNP

Dear fairy godmother,

I have been having trouble with life since that terrible day.

Firstly mummy has been very cross with me for speaking to strangers and going off the path.
Granny has not wanted to see me because she was eaten by a giant rabbit!!!

If you can help please reply I am so sad and a bit worried that the rabbit will come back for me.


Thanks for taking time to read this letter please try and think up a way to help me.


Yours truly
Little red riding hood

Caitlin's Goldilocks letters...

You have earned a ClassDojo for these Caitlin.  You are working hard!


Dear the three bears,

I am very sorry about what I did.

Please try and forgive me as I thought the youngest bear would be so friendly to me.
I will replace EVERYTHING I have damaged and get each and every one of you a little something when I go to Blackpool.

If we do make up would you like to come with me. My says yes to everything plus she loves bears what a bonus so please reply to me oh and what time would be suitable to send the furniture to you house.

from Goldilocks
  xxx


Dear Goldilocks,

Thanks for the sob story we will forgive you on one condition you promise to never brake into our house ever again.  Sorry this letter is so short but really we don't know what to say.

We wish you the best of luck in life.

From the three bears
 xxx


P.S Send the furniture at 1.30pm on Friday.

3 little pigs... a different view

Caitlin M in Year 5 has just sent me a fabulous piece of writing taking on a character from the 3 Little Pigs.  


I'll say no more but it's a must read below...

Dear Mummy pig,

I have been desperate to talk to you since... that terrible day. The day I nearly died.


Well, I met a man with some straw and built a house but than a nasty fox came along and blew it down with just one huff and puff.


It was so horrible to see my wonderful house being destroyed by a FOX. I mean... I know the story of the three little pigs having their houses blown down by a wolf but, seriously, a fox! How unoriginal! Since when has there been a fox that can blow a house down? It is just crazy!


Anyway more to the point...  Are you okay? I am fine. I was only in hospital for 2 days.


I know you might not want to talk about him but how is dad? Is he and his goose girlfriend happy? Please, please, please with a cherry on top try and get back with him as it would mean the world to me if you did.


Love loads
Polly pig
xxxxx

The Lost Star, by Katy Y5

It was a stormy night when a twinkling shadow fell from the sky. The shadow fell swiftly into a fast flowing river waiting for someone to find it.

Eight years later a small girl was born.  Her thoughtful mother named her Emmalisa. She had long golden hair that glimmered in any weather. When Emmalisa was only nine she was surprisingly the most beautiful girl in her home town named the Golden City which was named after the sparkling stars in the night sky.

Because Emmalisa was so small she never got to see the stars. So one night Emmalisa secretly slipped out of her room to see the stars .She crept down the creaky stairs and went into the kitchen. Emmalisa (who was still in her spotty pyjamas) slowly reached into the cupboard and grabbed the metal keys that opened the front door. Emmalisa crept outside and locked the door behind her and left the keys in the lock.

After Emmalisa had walked for a couple of minutes she stopped in front of a vast, flowing river there was no way of getting to the over side so she turned around and headed for home. Then Emmalisa looked up at the night sky to see that there were no stars at. All Emmalisa could see was total darkness. But then out of the corner of her eye she saw a light shining at the bottom of the endless river. Emmalisa closed her eye thinking it was all a dream.  Then she opened them.  It wasn’t…

Without thinking Emmalisa jumped into the river! What she didn’t know was that the giant river was so cold but it was too late. Emmalisa was already in. Emmalisa plunged into the racing rapids, closing her eyes as she slowly drifted to the bottom! A few seconds later she opened her eyes to see that she was still under the water. Emmalisa reached out and grabbed the glowing light. Emmalisa suddenly panicked as she saw a dark shadow moving towards her.  She quickly swam to the surface gasping wildly for air.  Her hands were still clutched together. Emmalisa gradually made her way to the edge of the river as she shivered. Then she leaned over the side trying not to fall in.  Then Emmalisa saw the dark shadow was only a small fish.

As Emmalisa walked home she felt something moving in her hand.  She tried to ignore it but it was so hard not to so she opened her hand and saw the  light that she had found in the river. Before she could say a word the light shot up into the sky like a bullet. Emmalisa looked up in surprise to see all the stars were back shining as normal. Emmalisa didn’t know what to say so she just ran back to her house to see her mum and dad waiting there.

The next morning Emmalisa woke up still trying to figure out what had happened that night.

The Last Hope by Blake, Y5

10 years ago something that could change the world forever happened... one man defeated the blood sucking dolls and the ghost pirates. They were going to take over the entire world forever, but this man had no fear. He set off at the exact date of the 31^st January 2002. This is the year that they called the scariest of all. This man set off feeling brave and buoyant.  But little did he know what was in store for him on his very long journey ahead. He had the power to do anything with the world.

 When he was out of the city he heard a strange noise coming from behind him. “What was it?” he thought.   Then the thing behind him pounced at him menacingly.

The thing hit him so hard he got knocked out, so the beast dragged him away. When he woke up he was in a strange, rotting place with bones scattered all over. He gulped hard trembling with fear. He thought that this was the end of him and most importantly, the quest! But when he observed the beast he noticed that it was sleeping. Then he saw that the door was open. This was his chance to escape! Now he knew that his quest and his life were not over.

But just as he got up, the beast heard him and quickly got up to stop him from escaping! He gasped, but then he built up confidence and fought bare handed! The beast was tough but that didn’t stop him from fighting, and with one punch on the nose the beast was defeated. He felt undefeatable. “No one can stop me,” he thought. “I am invincible!” Then he noticed an immense mountain so he decided to climb up it,” This is taking forever” he said to himself. Finally he reached a cave full of bats and just beneath the bats he saw a cryptic door.

On the door there was a picture of a skull and crossbones and a doll with blood in its mouth. This must be the secret base of the bad creatures. “But how do I get inside? There must be a way!” Then he remembered that he could do anything,  so he made a sarsen come and break down the door,  “It worked!” he said in joy “This might actually come in handy.” So with that he entered the mammoth humid base covered in blood and bodies. Then he heard a doll coming his way, “I’m doomed!” he whispered

Then, just around the corner, came a whole bunch of blood sucking dolls.  “Shall I escape or shall I fight?” he thought . Then he started to battle the beast. The first hit was from the beast but in his pocket he found a knife so he used it against them and won. Then came the pirates but when they saw the dead dolls they got terrified and went to hell.

Will you remember 2002? 

The Crystal by Levi, Y5

One ordinary boy called Jonathan found a teleporter in an old shack. It was all rusty and looked very old.  It was silver and gold.  Jonathan ran in the teleporter and ZAP! In a flash of lightning Jonathan was gone. Jonathan had gone where nobody has ever discovered before. Jonathon thought it was marvellous but suddenly he heard an echoing sound coming from beneath him (he assumed).   What’s  that? He went to see what it was.  When he went down a rocky path, he saw a scaled monster. It was as smooth as a cotton fleece with hands as light as a feather and it had a big round black nose with a tremendously long tail. 

Jonathan wondered if he would have to kill it before it killed him so he ran away to a cold, damp grey cave.  Inside the cave Jonathan laid down to try to get some sleep, but he saw a shiny, see-through green crystal. It was the most powerful source ever made.  He picked it up and it turned all his arms, legs and his body into crystal.  He could shoot crystals out of his hands and when he slipped it now wouldn’t hurt him. He was so powerful that he could pick up a fully grown tree. One day he found a tremendously big griffin.  So he thought that he would be smart about this.  He slyly crept up to the griffin and pounced on the griffin and grabbed its hair and went for a ride on it. Up they went  but on the way there Jonathan spotted a hovering marine ship but there weren’t just marines in the ship.  They were robot marines.  They were gold and red with a sparkling yellow machine gun.  They were heavily armoured with a helmet as strong as steel.  Jonathan did not know that they saw him.  Suddenly the marines slid down a rope.  There was silence but then there was war.  The commander announced, “Attack!”

The herd of marines ran towards him. Jonathan started to fire the crystals out of his hands but there were just too many of them.  Jonathan had an idea.  He pointed his crystals at the sun so the brightness blinded the marines but it didn’t stop them.  They just kept on running towards him.  Jonathan started to run towards them.  He started to kill them with a grin on his face.  He threw them all over the place.  He tore them to pieces and stabbed them all over.  Finally there was one soldier left... the captain. All of a sudden his crystal was out of power.  He transformed into his normal self.  The captain bellowed out loud saying, “You put my soldiers through all this!”

The captain was so mad he shot the boy in the neck but Jonathan still had some power left in him.  Jonathan picked up his crystal and stabbed him.

Jonathan died with pride.        

Admire our persuasive techniques!

Enjoy reading Max & Joshua's persuasive letters from Year 5.

Following our trip on Monday, they twisted a set of facts to try to persuade the Victorian prime minister Mr Disraeli to improve working conditions for children.

Can you spot their techniques?

Dear Mr Disraeli

I am writing to tell you that the mining conditions are horrible! Please change the way miners are  working or at least the child miners mainly because millions of rats live with the poor workers .

Secondly ,more than half of the workers  have seen a serious injury or had the roof collapse on them in fact I’m surprised you  have any workers left!

Also, there are no toilets down the mines so it will be difficult to go to the bathroom and millions of poor children are losing limbs doing your dirty work  .

Although you are getting rich and it’s all happy for you, it’s terrible for your poor workers  

Therefore no child under the age of ten should do down a coal mine and that is final!

Yours sincerely

lord shaftesbury

Lord shaftesbury

History Mystery Tour

Year 5 and 6 visited the National Coal Mining Museum on Monday 23^rd January to find out about life at work for children in Victorian Britain.  When they got back, they imagined being the inspectors they heard about; listening to stories from the children who worked underground.  Here’s what they heard...

Written by inspector Blake

When you’re down the mine, if you don’t keep your feet in, a coal cart could come and chop off your foot!  My step dad always brought a candle, but he took it with him, and it’s so dark you cannot see a thing. If you sang like I did, and missed the coal cart you would get beaten, or worse you would die!  While you're down there, you could even hear the the rats scattering about.

If you die, the people who own the mine don’t care, they just hire some more people for the job. The worst thing would have to be going down into the mine, because it was only a piece of rope and a stick and if you fell off it you were DEAD!  You even had to work naked because it was so hot. Also if you fell asleep you would more likely to have your legs sliced off!

After interviewing the poor Sam who worked in the mines at just the age of five I went home.

History Mystery Tour

Year 5 and 6 visited the National Coal Mining Museum on Monday 23^rd January to find out about life at work for children in Victorian Britain.  When they got back, they imagined being the inspectors they heard about; listening to stories from the children who worked underground.  Here’s what they heard...

Inspector Lauren M

When I   went down the mine I was so scared and frightened because of my step dad said” keep your feet in or they will get chopped off and it wouldn't be a pretty sight."

If you sat there like I did singing you would get battered or even worse!

  My step dad came  in and said “you have to open the door for the cart to weal in were my mother and father would fill it up ready to come out  but I didn’t understand I was only five years old” .  

It was that warm it was ladies and men also children had to take all there clothes off.

All I could hear in the mine was the rats scuttling all over wounded men and women   even children how horrible.

The biggest amount of money you could get was three and a half p if you worked hard enough but the men only got paid   I worked  for nothing as a boy because apparently the men worked harder than all the other people .

Nobody liked the job because it was very scary and deadly.

Lots of my friends died because of one of the planks of wood had fallen and all of my friends died on that day and I used to carry a snack wrapped up in a cloth but when I’d finished  my job I went to grab my food but it was gone the rats and mice ate it .

The first time my dad told me what I had to do I sat there in darkness singing.

The worst part was getting down into the mine because all the lifts did not have safety nets on the sides   so nobody dared stand by the net .

History Mystery Tour

Year 5 and 6 visited the National Coal Mining Museum on Monday 23^rd January to find out about life at work for children in Victorian Britain.  When they got back, they imagined being the inspectors they heard about; listening to stories from the children who worked underground.  Here’s what they heard...

Inspector Leah:

When I was down in the mine I was very scared and frightened because my mean step dad took the candle with him and left me sat there with no candle and  it was very dark. I had to open the doors with a string to let the go cart in. If I didn’t open the doors in time my step dad would come out and beat me. Boys the age of 8 had to pull a car full of coal and it was as heavy as an elephant. Girls were not allowed to go underground. If you fell asleep your leg would get chopped off by the go cart. You was not allowed to sing down the mine because you wouldn’t hear the go cart coming and your dad would beat you again and it hurt. You had to be 8 and over to go down the mine. Boys that are 8 and 9 had to pull go carts full of coal he found it very hard. They had to go down in a metal cage with no front or back most people who went in the metal cage fell out and got trapped or killed. Sometimes when you went down you had no food or water. When you was a trapper you had to work very hard so you don’t let the air out of the doors if you did you would suffocate. Samuel’s father had to see if it was real or not and the women had to see if there was stone with the coal if there was stone they had to throw it away. Women had to do hard work as well not just sit around doing  nothing women found it hard but not as hard as the men did. When I was down the mine my step sister and brothers got trapped under a collapsed roof of the mine. It took them 3 weeks to get out. Do  you think it sounds easy?  I got found on a door step by the orphanage when they looked out and found me they took me in and after someone had they called me samual

                                      

History Mystery Tour

Year 5 and 6 visited the National Coal Mining Museum on Monday 23^rd January to find out about life at work for children in Victorian Britain.  When they got back, they imagined being the inspectors they heard about; listening to stories from the children who worked underground.  Here’s what they heard...

Inspector Alisha:

“I hate the mine.” Said an eight-year old boy named Samuel Fletcher.

“It is pitch - black down there – when you get down there you can’t see a thing. On my very first time my Father stayed with me for only a few seconds – and when he left he took his lantern with him so I was left all alone in the dark. Another horrible job to do is pull a heavy cart of coal while my step – sister pushes. One mistake I did when I was about five years old was to take a piece of nice, creamy cake down with me to the mine. I put it next to me so I could shovel up the coal at the same time. When I was finished, however, I reached out for my delicious piece of cake – but it wasn’t there! Some horrid, greedy mice had eaten it!

“As scary as this was I couldn’t blame my Father for making me work hard. I mean, he himself must have once needed to work hard to earn his two-and a half pence a week.  All of these things seem scary, but the most scariest thing is the cage. The cage is a contrapment which takes you down to the mine. It might be safer than the rope but if you fall through you can face much worse consequences. I’d better lower my voice now – I need to tell you something that the mine – people cannot hear me saying. I personally think that they force me and the other children to work overly hard.”

History Mystery

Year 5 and 6 visited the National Coal Mining Museum on Monday 23^rd January to find out about life at work for children in Victorian Britain.  When they got back, they imagined being the inspectors they had heard about; listening to stories from the children who worked underground.  Here’s what they heard...

Inspectors Katy & Kayleigh:

When I was down In the coal mine I smelt the horrible, running sewage dripping down the mouldy pipes. I had the worst job just sitting there in the the pitch black mine holding a rope just waiting for my mother or farther to knock on the door for me too open ( I was named a trapper boy )

Once my mother made me a currant bun I was delighted. I put it down next to me (BAD MISTAKE) one of the rats eat it.

It was scary in the coal mine my father only had one candle but he took it in with him so I was left alone in the dark and the only live things I could talk to were the scurrying rats.”I hated it!”

They were horses working in the mine pulling carts full of coal. Only ponies pulled the carts because they were smaller than the other horses and they could.

If all of the candles get put out there would be no light in the coal mine and most of us will get hurt or even worst killed.

That is how dangerous it is in the coal mine.

History Mystery Tour

Year 5 and 6 visited the National Coal Mining Museum on Monday 23^rd January to find out about life at work for children in Victorian Britain.  When they got back, they imagined being the inspectors they had heard about; listening to stories from the children who worked underground.  Here’s what they heard...

INSPECTOR MEGAN

“The hardest job to do down in the dark and dusty coal mine is when a boy has to pull a cart full of coal”. Said Samuel Fletcher.

“When my dad took me down to the coal mine for the first time I was only five and I didn’t know what to do because I had never been down in a coal mine before and then he took a light down so we could see and then he went with the light and left me alone with no light just nothing and I was left in the pitch black all on my own”.

“Once my mother made me a creamy delicious cake and I took it down to the mine and I put it down on a piece of brown dirty cloth and then I went to grab a lovely piece and then it was gone the ugly, vicious rats had eaten it all I can still imagine how massive the rats were”.

“When a boy (aged 8-9 years) had to pull a cart full of dusty coal his older sister (aged 11-12 years) also had to help but instead of pulling she had to push. She had to wear a scarlet damp cloth but if she didn’t wear a cloth on her forehead she would have a bald patch in the middle of her head”.

Fabulous thank you letter

Glenaire Primary School
Thompson Lane
Baildon

BD17 LY


Dear Mr Pearce

I am writing to tell you how good I thought you were in Robin Hood.

I liked the way you went in the waterfall it was cool, I loved the way you made the words in the waterfall. Did you enjoy doing it?

Next year I would like to see you doing Snow White as it’s my favourite pantomime and last time I saw you do it, you were only a mirror! Could you please please please play Snow White though as this would be very funny!

Yours sincerely

Caitlin B

Eye witness homework report from Caitlin B

The door of doom

Caitlin M worked on this at home. What a fabulous and entertaining story.  Well done! 


The door of doom

Once in a vast city a family lived. There was a mum, a dad and 3 children, but there was something not quite right about their home. There was a door that was always locked and had never been opened. The children were called Electra, Zoe and Tammie and they were very curious about what might be behind the door. One of them (Zoe) even tried to open the door just for a quick look but it was like steel. Although they had been told never to go into the room they were always writing in their old school books and thinking about what might be behind the mysterious door. One idea was that it was full of little evil elves that were planning on taking over the world and turn everyone into frogs (except girls of course) or maybe a lion that was so hungry when it came out it would scoff everything in sight WARNING: Including humans. 
But the best idea was that it was a little pixy from the end of the rainbow and it had the biggest pot of gold ever and gave everyone £20,000.


These ideas probably weren’t right but still the 3 of them spent hours and hours making up stories of what might happen if they ever opened the door!

One cold Saturday morning the Electra woke up to the sweet smell of bacon, eggs, sausage and fried toast. This was the most glories smell ever she sat up and shot down the stairs and saw a fresh fry up laid on the table. So she took her seat and began to eat this mouth-watering breakfast.

Later that day her mum came out and told her to go to the posh shop (this is the name of the shop) and pick up some new earrings for her and Electra wondered why.


As she returned with Zoe and Tammie they heard a boom from an unknown place. It came from a place in the house that was for sure so they sprinted up the stairs to the locked door. It was open and ebony black is what they saw and started to wander in… 


As they approached the door knob a creak came from inside the room and the quickly ran in and saw…………

NOTHING it was black and full of boxes how would they find anything in this room it was so bad Tammie fell over and landed on something that wasn’t hard and wasn’t soft it was both.  They ran out of the room and got torches they raced up the stairs to find something enormous in the corner and they walked slowly towards it

The THING they found was wet and slimy well wet and snotty. This unusual thing sneezed and blue bogeys splatted all over the girls and they screamed with discuss and the animal of some sort said “sorry I have a, a, a”
“Oh no” screamed all the girls together and they ducked like a lightning flash just as blue bogies splashed all over the walls of the room.
“Who are you” asked Zoe 
“Well I, I, I… false alarm!”
“Good.” Electra said 
“Any how I am professor Bluetrue the goblin AND I WANT TO GO HOME!”
“Okay we will help you how can we get you home”
“Well you need to cure my sneezes and I can get home myself”
“How do we cure your sneezes then” Asked Zoe
“With medicine of course my oh my where do you come from America?”
“What normal medicine like our medicine”
“Yes what other kind of medicine”

So the girls rushed off and got cold medicine and cough medicine luckily they worked and soon professor Bluetrue was home again
(Hopefully)


P.S if you see a green looking elf that sneezes blue bogies than put him in a spacious place you don’t want to be carrying blue bogies all the way back to the girls home do you!!!